who didn’t live,
who merely existed.
She was a girl who was always
a beat too late,
a step too slow.
Always struggling to catch up
with everyone else
until she just stopped
trying.
She was a girl who lived her life in a perpetual daze,
waiting for the end of her perpetual days,
days that blurred into
each other until she couldn’t figure out when one ended
and the other began. She spent all day waiting for night because for her, dreams were her escape.
In her dreams, she never fell behind
she was the music, the pace,
she was it all
in the day she was constantly in the shadows but at night she basked in the moonlight
in her dreams she was no longer a girl
who was only ever looked at
out of the corner of someone’s eye,
an afterthought
some people can’t tell dreams from reality but it was so easy for her because she knew that if she felt alive she was asleep
in her dreams she was no longer a girl
who went through her life knowing she could disappear at any moment
and no one would care
in her dreams
she was somebody
awake, she was lifeless but
in her dreams she was life itself
Isabella!! This is really good, I liked the word play on daze and days. I like the story of this poem; it is really cool! Good job!
ReplyDeleteI like how you contrasted the girl when she was awake vs. when she was sleeping.
ReplyDeleteI really loved the imagery you used in this poem! My favorite line was "in the day she was constantly in the shadows but at night she basked in the moonlight". It really brings together the main messages of the poem.
ReplyDeleteThis is so cool! You open up the poem really well when you say "She was a girl / who didn’t live, / who merely existed". It's a cool line that uses enjambment to really drive a point home.
ReplyDeleteThis is really well written! I love how you used line breaks to emphasize your points. My favorite line was, "awake, she was lifeless but in her dreams she was life itself" because it really closes your poem in a way the makes your message clear.
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