The basement is
dark
grim
and uninviting.
The ominous groans
of the boiler recall stories of ghouls.
The rhythmic thump
of the washing machine is a zombie’s steady gait.
The eerie silence
of the closet surely houses vampires.
A shadowy graveyard for all things
joyous.
A seemingly impenetrable fortress of depression.
But once the lights turn on
the basement is
transformed.
Stretching from wall to wall,
everything the light touches seems to change.
Like an angel blessing every
corner of the room,
it transforms the brooding basement
into a shimmering oasis of brightness.
It is funny
how something as simple as light
can make the frightening
Happy.
I really like your use of metaphors and the way you described the setting was really good!
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line was the line 'boiler recall stories of ghouls'
ReplyDeleteI like how you used metaphors and personification to emphasize your point.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line is 'The rhythmic thump
ReplyDeleteof the washing machine is a zombie’s steady gait.' One of my favorite aspects of the piece is the contrast when the light begins to pour in and reshape the room.
I like your use of enjambed to make your point and also your contrast of the basement after the lights turn on.
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