Unloved/ Loved
I am unloved
It’s impossible for me to even consider
You love me just as much as my sisters
Because I can tell by the way you talk to me
That I just disappoint you
I will never believe
That I can be just as happy as Emma or just as cute as Cara
I know
I am useless as a daughter, sister, friend
I lie to myself when I think
That I have a joyful smile and a gentle touch
And every time I look in the mirror I tell myself
My presence is a burden
And no one believes
I am so full of life and wonder
And I am convinced that
I’m empty as a person
Anything you say won’t make me believe
That I am loved, deserving of love, and have so much love to give
My life supports the fact
That I only bring issues to other’s lives
I know that it’s a lie when I tell myself
I am loved
(Now read bottom up)
I love your poem so much it seems so simple at first but this simplicity makes it work beautifully and there's a level of thought and complexity put into this piece that I could never achieve, I loved it.
ReplyDeleteI love how you incorporated the "read bottom up" in your poem! This poem is very well written and I found it so interesting to read it normally and then reverse. I also really like the message and meaning of this poem and how you describe this feeling with imagery.
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem, the structure of it is so cool, and I think it's a really impactful and beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteI love this poem, it sounds like it would make a great performance poem. My favorite line of this poem is,"I am so full of life and wonder
ReplyDeleteand I am convinced that I’m empty as a person" because of the contrast.
The simplicity of the poem definitely conveys your message better than anything complicated. Something I noticed and felt really ties the poem together is
ReplyDelete"My presence is a burden / / / / I'm empty as a person".
This is so cool how you can read it both ways! I also love the main message of your poem, and how it's really important to love yourself no matter what. My favorite line is "It's impossible for me to even consider / I am unloved" (written backwards).
ReplyDeleteI love this! It is very interesting how you have different messages going up and down, that is a very creative way to emphasize your message and it is very cool sounding.
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful poem and it really shows something you care a lot about. I love everything about it and gives us a deep message about what matters to you. Lovely!
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