Today
My desk collapsed into a boat and sailed off without me,
Thorns grew on rosebushes violent
before a rumor of buds had even been whispered,
before a rumor of buds had even been whispered,
I lost sight of my telescope and was blind to storms on the horizon
Going nowhere
Gone
Yesterday
Eyes turned coal to diamonds
Slouched shoulders were peaking mountains bursting across skylines
and playsets were kingdoms I couldn’t afford
Of course
I was always a dreamer
But I never fell asleep
because despite what people tell you
that’s not where dreams get achieved
Dreams
hang from flagpoles and top shelves
They're the rainbows’ ends never chased down
They make friends with shadows,
cameramen out of dust bunnies
and wait
For their moment.
I liked how you used personification on the first stanza, it was fun to read
ReplyDeleteThis is such a great poem because it's very creative and you need to read carefully to understand what's going on. The detail and imagery throughout was amazing, I loved the line "My desk collapsed into a boat and sailed off without me," as it's a very interesting line and creates a great scene in my head of a desk turning into a boat. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI like the creativity of your poem including the different metaphors and similes; I felt like they added a lot to your overall message. The poem was a little confusing at first, but as it went on, I realized the figurate language was all part of a greater messege.
ReplyDeleteI liked how your picture tied in with the main theme of your poem. It really captured the essence of your poem about how life keeps on going and never waits for you.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is extremely artistically written with personification in practically every line. The materials used to portray the contradictions (coal/diamonds, thorns/rosebuds) really emphasize the yin and yang. Very well done :)
ReplyDeleteI like how you used indentation to make your poem more interesting.
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