Does a tree exist without a forest?
A drop of water without an ocean?
A grain of sand without a beach?
All have a source.
And to that they shall return.
For the tree that sheds its leaves in the winter returns to the forest
with the rain.
The drop of water returns to the ocean
with a river.
The grain of sand returns to the beach
with the wind.
All in the same, we cannot exist without the Tao.
For we are from the Tao,
and we shall return to the Tao.
And when we are ready,
we will be born again.
I really enjoy how you formatted your poem overall, it fits in nicely with the themes of the Tao and what it teaches.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the examples you used, lets me picture it in my head.
ReplyDeleteI like the how you connected all the different elements and compared how they would return to where they came from. Overall the message of the poem is very nice; a kind of circle of life theme that is portrayed very well.
ReplyDeleteThe way you place your sentences and format the poem makes it much more interesting. Good job!
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